Dear sir,　　As I am a student who can stand by myself, I am writing to request if you can assist me to　　find a student who need help .　　I wonder whether it is convenient for you if two things regarding the child taken into account.　　First, the child shou come from Yushu where suffer from the disaster badly. Second, it will be better　　if he is a primary school student ,so I can support by myself .　　I woud like to gei him my assistance until he gratuates from college. Your attention to my inquiry　　would be highly apprieciated. Your sinerely ,　　Li Ming點(diǎn)評(píng)：5分　　你基本上理解了題目要求，但是文章結(jié)構(gòu)不盡合理，層次不夠清晰，你就寫(xiě)成三段即可，或者兩段。這樣層次比較清晰，可能是由于具體的段落格式的問(wèn)題，現(xiàn)在這樣，感覺(jué)很亂，一個(gè)意群要放在一起。注意拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)完之后一定要檢查一下，看有沒(méi)有這種錯(cuò)誤。注意后面署名的格式問(wèn)題。課后多看看范文，學(xué)習(xí)結(jié)構(gòu)安排和語(yǔ)言表達(dá)方面的技巧。加油啊。