技法3| 豐富充實的細節信息

　　開頭好只是表象內容好才是真的好。具體的表達往往比泛泛而談更能引起讀者的共鳴。換句話說寫作需要“真善美”盡量避免“假大空”。那么如何做到內容充實呢？答案就是注重細節。例如句子本身沒什么毛病但是如果我們再具體一些我的哪位朋友？修理的是怎樣的汽車？這樣是不是會表達得更好。我們不妨把句子改成My friend his 12－year－old Santana.這樣既增加了詞數又充實了細節。請看下面的習作對比孰優孰劣不言而喻。寫作要求：學校要舉行一場題為“Turning a bad mood into a good one”的英語作文比賽要求你寫一篇文章其中一個要點是如何調整心情。習作一：Keeping a good mood is of great importance.When you feel angry or anxious temper and we should always make ourselves happy.

　　習作二：We should learn to keep a good mood.Communicating with family members or friends is the best choice.Also listening to some peaceful music can be helpful.Reading is another way to stop being mad.

　　(2024·全國乙卷)假定你是李華暑假想去一家外資公司兼職已寫好申請書和個人簡歷(resume)。給外教Ms Jenkins寫信請她幫你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。

　　注意：1.詞數100左右；

　　可以適當增加細節以使行文連貫?？忌魑?點評與優化My English is very poorn meet a lot of difficulties in finding a job.So I must try my best to learn English well.If I can't learn English well，I can't find a good job. [細節信息點評]

　　(1)上面的作文雖然詞數不算少但有用的句子卻沒有幾個屬于“假大空”。

　　(2)內容應圍繞著讓對方改正一些錯

　　[嘗試優化]

　　作文提升[參考范文][滿分作文]perience，I plan to find a part－time job in a foreign capital company.I have already finished my job application form and personal resume.However you a letter，hoping to get your guide and suggestions.You can correct any mistakes you find in them. This summer I intend to take up a part－time job in a foreign companyng experience and meet new friends.My application and resume have been prepared and I sincerely hope you can help me polish them.Firstly，I'm wondering if you can help add some contents.Besides，if there are some mistakes in them，I hope you can help correct them.

　　技法3| 豐富充實的細節信息

　　開頭好只是表象內容好才是真的好。具體的表達往往比泛泛而談更能引起讀者的共鳴。換句話說寫作需要“真善美”盡量避免“假大空”。那么如何做到內容充實呢？答案就是注重細節。例如句子本身沒什么毛病但是如果我們再具體一些我的哪位朋友？修理的是怎樣的汽車？這樣是不是會表達得更好。我們不妨把句子改成My friend his 12－year－old Santana.這樣既增加了詞數又充實了細節。請看下面的習作對比孰優孰劣不言而喻。寫作要求：學校要舉行一場題為“Turning a bad mood into a good one”的英語作文比賽要求你寫一篇文章其中一個要點是如何調整心情。習作一：Keeping a good mood is of great importance.When you feel angry or anxious temper and we should always make ourselves happy.

　　習作二：We should learn to keep a good mood.Communicating with family members or friends is the best choice.Also listening to some peaceful music can be helpful.Reading is another way to stop being mad.

　　(2024·全國乙卷)假定你是李華暑假想去一家外資公司兼職已寫好申請書和個人簡歷(resume)。給外教Ms Jenkins寫信請她幫你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。

　　注意：1.詞數100左右；

　　可以適當增加細節以使行文連貫?？忌魑?點評與優化My English is very poorn meet a lot of difficulties in finding a job.So I must try my best to learn English well.If I can't learn English well，I can't find a good job. [細節信息點評]

　　(1)上面的作文雖然詞數不算少但有用的句子卻沒有幾個屬于“假大空”。

　　(2)內容應圍繞著讓對方改正一些錯

　　[嘗試優化]

　　作文提升[參考范文][滿分作文]perience，I plan to find a part－time job in a foreign capital company.I have already finished my job application form and personal resume.However you a letter，hoping to get your guide and suggestions.You can correct any mistakes you find in them. This summer I intend to take up a part－time job in a foreign companyng experience and meet new friends.My application and resume have been prepared and I sincerely hope you can help me polish them.Firstly，I'm wondering if you can help add some contents.Besides，if there are some mistakes in them，I hope you can help correct them.