考研英語作文批改范例13

　　To whom it may concern,　　I am writing to express my request to support tuition fee of （建議刪掉）a stundent （student）in （需要冠詞a）remote area.　　I wonder if it is convenvient（convenient） for you to offer me partcular（particular） accounts of the child regarging（reagarding） his/（or）her family background. Firstly, the child most come from West China（建議改為I prefer a child from the western part of China） because it is improtant to train the talent（educat a talent哪一個(gè)更好？） for local area（根據(jù)你要表達(dá)的意思，建議改為It is important to develop the education situation there. ）. Secondly, the child was forced to drop out of school for the reason that family could not afford his/ her education.　　I will provide all his/her expendure（expenditure） at school untill（until） he/she graduates from school. I promise（原文更好） that I will perform my responsibilities.（都可以）　　I would like to （只需要would，would like to do意義不同。）be grateful for your replay.　　Yours sincerely　　Li Ming